Monday’s Finish the Story Challenge – Promenade at Sunset

I am a bum. Here’s a piece in response to Monday’s Finish the Story Challenge for May 25th, which is supposed to be 150 words based on this image–

© 2015, Barbara W. Beacham
© 2015, Barbara W. Beacham

and this initial sentence–

“The only residents remaining in the small town of Miners Hill are spirits.”

Well, I modified the initial sentence and went over the limit, so I deserve derision. Feel free.

Copyright 2015 Douglas Daniel
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“The only residents remaining in the town of Miner’s Hill are spirits,” said the tour guide.

“What a joke!” the loud tourist exclaimed. “You hear this guy, honey?”

“Yes, Howard,” the wife said wearily.

The tour guide smiled. He led us through the streets, telling the history of the old buildings– the Mercantile Bank, where the Gerrity gang shot it out with townsfolk in ’89, the Silver Nugget Lounge, the worst den of sin west of Dodge City, and the jail, out of which Madman Hancock blasted his way in ’73.

“They say that, on moonlit nights, the old townsfolk come out and promenade around, just like in the old days,” the guide said.

“That’s a fine story, mister,” the loud tourist said.

At sundown the guide took us back to the parking lot. The other tourists bundled themselves into their cars; but I lingered, looking back. The guide had disappeared. As the sun went down behind Scorpion Ridge, and the moon rose in the east, I thought I saw men in broad-brimmed hats, and ladies in long dresses, walking arm-in-arm along the dusty streets.

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7 thoughts on “Monday’s Finish the Story Challenge – Promenade at Sunset”

  1. A well written and interesting story. 🙂 There will always be one in every group with an obnoxious attitude! I’m glad the viewpoint character believed enough to stay and see the ghosts.

  2. I have had that same fellow on a number of tours that I have been on. Is there no getting away from him? I loved your story Doug! Thanks for your contribution to the challenge. Be well… ^..^

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