Monday’s Finish the Story– The Swag

Monday’s Finish the Story flash fiction challenge for February 2nd– 150 words based on this picture–

Copyright 2015 Barbara W. Beacham
Copyright 2015 Barbara W. Beacham

and this initial sentence– “Diamond Jack had his hideout next to the Rattlesnake River.”

Copyright 2015 Douglas Daniel

Diamond Jack had his hideout next to the Rattlesnake River. It was the only human habitation in three hundred square miles.

The day after his biggest heist ever, Jack rode down to his hideout, rejoicing. In his saddle-bags were crammed ten thousand silver dollars, taken from the Denver express. It was all Jack’s, because after the robbery he had shot his two accomplices, Sergei McCooley and Chihuahua Chelsey, in the back. He piled the silver on his table, gloating over it and admiring its gleam.

He went down to the river to get a bucket of water for his coffee and was bitten to death by a rattlesnake. In 1973 his swag was found by a hippie couple searching for themselves. They used the money to open a health-food store and, later, a pot dispensary.

Moral: who the hell builds a hideout next to some place called Rattlesnake River?


27 thoughts on “Monday’s Finish the Story– The Swag”

  1. Love the moral to the story Doug! And the hippie couple too! 🙂 Well done! Thanks for participating and I hope that you take up the challenge again next week! Be well…. ^..^

    1. Weeelll….friends would have been stretching it considerable, as they were all desperate criminals…although Chelsey’s biggest crime up to that point had been hijacking truckloads of Gucci handbags.

      Thanks for reading.

  2. Jack got his just rewards for shooting his friends – and very appropriately, too. What better way to kill him off than having him bitten by a rattler at Rattle Snake River. Great choice of names for Jack’s friends as well.

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