To the light

Another Finish the Story challenge, asking for 150 words based on this image–

Photo by: Barbara Beacham
Photo by: Barbara Beacham

and this opening sentence–

“Donning her fins and snorkel, she headed out into the deep water.”

Frankly, I’m not too sure about how this one turned out. It’s more suggestive of an opening than a complete story. Still, for what it’s worth, here it is.


Donning her fins and snorkel, she headed out into the deep water. She ignored the screams from shore. Done with you, she thought.

The water was warm and clear. She could see the bottom—rock and sand, waving seaweed, a furtive damselfish or two. It was calming. She needed calm right now.

She stroked forward, taking her time. It might be only minutes before the garda came out after her, but you couldn’t rush this. To be at peace is the key.

She felt it first in the pit of her stomach—a lurch as if the ocean had dropped out from under her, although nothing changed. She caught herself, then heard—

Are you sure, mortal?


Very well.

A spiraling light shone. She took a breath and dove down toward it. The sea spun around her and pulled her down into the light, into a new world.


12 thoughts on “To the light”

  1. I’m guessing the Garda won’t find her where she’s gone! Nice story. I liked “to be at peace is the key”, to be calm to allow the transition to this new world.

    1. Well, that’s what I would need to figure out before writing the complete story.

      But– off the top of my head, somehow life on land has become a dystopian nightmare and only the sea offers escape…at a price….

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